Mark Robins | Rubens

Character Name
Mark Robins

I Agree
Yes

Has this character appeared in a previous lore?
No

Age
32

Blood Type
A

Personality
Gentle, pacifist, he always helps anyone in danger if he can. He never uses violence against the "living" unless strictly necessary ... things change when he faces the "undead" ... he loves to break skulls and euphoria start rising inside him...

Character Motivations
He wants to build a safe place ... for him and for the community... a place where people can feel that they are still human beings

Physical Appearance
Athletic, slim, height 1.80. Dark but sincere eyes, tousled hair and a short beard with long sideburns. He loves to run, but only when it's not too dangerous ... he drinks large amounts of water

Character Image Link
https://cdn.fleetfeet.com/assets/Ti...ategy:entropy/Tired-Runner-Masthead--1200.jpg

Mechanical Occupation
Unemployed

In-Character Occupation
Unemployed

Biography
From an early age he lived in the countryside in a small town lost in centre Italy mountains. He studied until the age of 18, always getting high marks in school. Later he took a career as a professional athlete, as a long runner. In the best period of his career he was 31 years old, so he planned to go in Kentucky to follow his trainer, but once his flight landed the news on TV started talking about the first so called "Z cases". Few days later the cases were thousand, then million in all the country...and never heard his trainer back.. In that moment he realised that he couldn't never come back in his country and see his friends and relatives... Due to his strong affection to his friends and family, he started running, running and running… faster and faster… longer and longer! Now 1 year has passed and he decided to stop running and face the truth and get into action by helping those who can't run as fast as he can.

Would you like your character to start with any items?
Axe
Screwdriver

Would you like your character to start with any skills?
Running +3
Lightfoot +2
Sneaking +1
Dexterity +2

Blade accuracy +2
Blade guard +2
Blade Mantainance +2

Is your character a member of a group?
No

Alright Ruben, I'll be reviewing your application for now.

First off, Your application is good, But we need the Biography expanded to show at least an understanding of the lore, and a motivation for being in the Area.

Secondly, You're allowed more skill allotments than you've specified. With the duration of the apocalypse, Its likely your character will have gained more skills and traits to have survived this long.

Hi Holt
thanks for you to reply and for your time.. I modified the Biography and the skills. But what about the traits? It is up to you to create the character, so the traits too? In that caseI can provide to specify what is the best for my character

Hi, Reuben! I'm stepping in for Holt here to speed up the process a little.

Your biography was fairly ambiguous initially, but now it's even more clear that you've neglected to read the lore. There are countless points that conflict directly with what has been documented.

• You mention that Mark was "in the best period of his career [when] he was 31 years old." His age is listed as 32. We are currently 14 years into the apocalypse. It began in February 2015, and it is now April 2029 in-game. Mark would either be 44 or 45, depending on when his birthday is.
• Immediately after the mention of his age, you go on to say that Mark arrived in Kentucky at the beginning of the apocalypse. This is fine, but the lore does not take place in Kentucky. The lore clearly states that we are in Monroe County, New York. This is where Rochester is located, right on the border between the U.S. and Canada, for reference. Please mention how Mark came to be in New York over the last 14 years. It doesn't need to be detailed, but it wouldn't make sense for him to be in Kentucky.
• Finally, you mention that only one year has passed. That is incorrect. 14 years have passed, not one.

Please go through and adjust Mark's biography so that it fits the lore. You don't need to rewrite it entirely, but you do need to elaborate more on what he's done over the years and make it clear that 14 years have passed. Otherwise, I can't confidently say that you have read and understood the lore. Here is a link to the lore page in case you need it.

In regards to your skills, don't be afraid to request higher levels. 14 years is a long time, and someone could have absolutely mastered a skill in that time-span. I don't mind granting players multiple level 10 skills, as long as it makes sense. Since Mark was a professional athlete, he would realistically have far higher athletics and fitness skills than others. You're free to request whatever you'd like, however. You don't need to list the traits you plan on picking in-game.

Once you've made those fixes, reply again to bump the thread and either Holt or I will get back to you. Thanks!