Horus Oryn | Cheatmagician

• The biggest issue I'm seeing here is that you clearly did not read the lore. If you don't read the lore, you'll most likely have a harder time integrating your character into things. It's important that you have a firm grasp on the story so that you'll know what you're getting into, especially considering we're 15 years into the apocalypse. The apocalypse began in February 2015, and it is currently May 2030 in character. I'll link a few pages that can help you out since the lore page itself isn't very long!
  • What Remains Lore Page
  • Factions Sub-Forums
  • What Remains: Season 1 Lore Recap
  • Gateway Roleplay Wiki
• Your biography meets the one-paragraph minimum, but it doesn't include anything referencing the lore whatsoever. A good format to follow is early life/childhood, mid-life/adult years, present day. Of course, since this lore takes place 15 years into the apocalypse, it's very important that you give a brief overview of what Oryn has been doing over that time. Writing a concise biography will help you to get a better grasp of your character before jumping in.
  • You listed Oryn's age as 32. Taking the time into account, he would be ~47, at least. You can, of course, adjust this if you'd like. Just know that if you'd prefer to keep him as a 32-year-old, he would have been ~17 at the start.
• We require that all characters have a real first and last name. Oryn is a real first name, but you don't list his last name anywhere in your application. He can be whitelisted as just Oryn, as long as you include his last name somewhere.
• Oryn's personality and motivations are fairly short. Could you elaborate a bit more on them? This will help you to characterize him better. What you have currently doesn't tell me very much about him.
• Finally, his appearance description doesn't match the faceclaim photo you provided. You may want to adjust it so that one is accurate to the other.

Pika said

Heya, Cheatmagician! I'm Pika and I'll be reviewing your application today.

Before we can move further with the application process, there are a few things I need to touch upon:

• The biggest issue I'm seeing here is that you clearly did not read the lore. If you don't read the lore, you'll most likely have a harder time integrating your character into things. It's important that you have a firm grasp on the story so that you'll know what you're getting into, especially considering we're 15 years into the apocalypse. The apocalypse began in February 2015, and it is currently May 2030 in character. I'll link a few pages that can help you out since the lore page itself isn't very long!
  • What Remains Lore Page
  • Factions Sub-Forums
  • What Remains: Season 1 Lore Recap
  • Gateway Roleplay Wiki
• Your biography meets the one-paragraph minimum, but it doesn't include anything referencing the lore whatsoever. A good format to follow is early life/childhood, mid-life/adult years, present day. Of course, since this lore takes place 15 years into the apocalypse, it's very important that you give a brief overview of what Oryn has been doing over that time. Writing a concise biography will help you to get a better grasp of your character before jumping in.
  • You listed Oryn's age as 32. Taking the time into account, he would be ~47, at least. You can, of course, adjust this if you'd like. Just know that if you'd prefer to keep him as a 32-year-old, he would have been ~17 at the start.
• We require that all characters have a real first and last name. Oryn is a real first name, but you don't list his last name anywhere in your application. He can be whitelisted as just Oryn, as long as you include his last name somewhere.
• Oryn's personality and motivations are fairly short. Could you elaborate a bit more on them? This will help you to characterize him better. What you have currently doesn't tell me very much about him.
• Finally, his appearance description doesn't match the faceclaim photo you provided. You may want to adjust it so that one is accurate to the other.

Once you've made all of those changes and additions, bump the thread by replying and we can continue with the application process. If you have any questions, let me know. Thanks!

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Pika said

Heya, Cheatmagician! I'm Pika and I'll be reviewing your application today.

Before we can move further with the application process, there are a few things I need to touch upon:

• The biggest issue I'm seeing here is that you clearly did not read the lore. If you don't read the lore, you'll most likely have a harder time integrating your character into things. It's important that you have a firm grasp on the story so that you'll know what you're getting into, especially considering we're 15 years into the apocalypse. The apocalypse began in February 2015, and it is currently May 2030 in character. I'll link a few pages that can help you out since the lore page itself isn't very long!
  • What Remains Lore Page
  • Factions Sub-Forums
  • What Remains: Season 1 Lore Recap
  • Gateway Roleplay Wiki
• Your biography meets the one-paragraph minimum, but it doesn't include anything referencing the lore whatsoever. A good format to follow is early life/childhood, mid-life/adult years, present day. Of course, since this lore takes place 15 years into the apocalypse, it's very important that you give a brief overview of what Oryn has been doing over that time. Writing a concise biography will help you to get a better grasp of your character before jumping in.
  • You listed Oryn's age as 32. Taking the time into account, he would be ~47, at least. You can, of course, adjust this if you'd like. Just know that if you'd prefer to keep him as a 32-year-old, he would have been ~17 at the start.
• We require that all characters have a real first and last name. Oryn is a real first name, but you don't list his last name anywhere in your application. He can be whitelisted as just Oryn, as long as you include his last name somewhere.
• Oryn's personality and motivations are fairly short. Could you elaborate a bit more on them? This will help you to characterize him better. What you have currently doesn't tell me very much about him.
• Finally, his appearance description doesn't match the faceclaim photo you provided. You may want to adjust it so that one is accurate to the other.

Once you've made all of those changes and additions, bump the thread by replying and we can continue with the application process. If you have any questions, let me know. Thanks!

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Cheatmagician said

Character Name
Horus Oryn

I Agree
Yes

Has this character appeared in a previous lore?
No

Age
20

Blood Type
O

Personality
Positive and a keen mind,like to talking and make friends, traveling around. He hate to be cheated. Always try his best to solve the problem till he cant do it anymore.

Character Motivations
The feeling want to help good people, his goal was to find a place where zombie cant reach and having a happy family.

Physical Appearance
Not bad-looking with short brown hair. Chin beard type, sharp eyes looking.

Character Image Link
https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/732266036463927439/853932148171866112/image2.png

Mechanical Occupation
Engineer

In-Character Occupation
Progammer and mechanic

Biography
Start when he seen his mom was a truly hero while she save people from the fire, but herself cant pass out after saved these are. Shocked by this he wanna let good people get a repay fit to what they deserve. Found himself really good with machines and progams, he manage to be a progammer. One day, the Z come. He managed to gather supply stuff to fix his own car and wandering on it, avoid the city and zombie.
Having a car give Horus Oryn much advantage, but that also the weak point of Oryn. While traveling out the town, he had found a group of people haven in a house, he knew that not a good idea because waves zombie in the night gonna wipe them from this world. His car have enough seat for this group though they only have 3 people, looted the police station armed them. More than a year wandering with Tom, Alex, james enough to delivery his rear for them.
One day, Oryn and his friends first met a mutant, its killed Alex and Tom right away. Oryn and James try to kill the mutant with handguns but that didnt make an effect to it. They ran to the car and drive as fast as they can to escape.
James got infected by the mutant claws and turn into zombie on the car, Oryn got bitten on forearm he kick James out the car and blow his head out. Oryn thinks that he gonna die soon but he still searching for a hope. Take out a bottle of disinfect, antiseptic the wound and wait. He didnt turn to a zombie, impressive. Oryn speculate, that maybe disinfect the wound in 1 hour might wipe the virus, keep him alive. He had found out something really important
Years gone by, now he a wanderer merchant who selling items to the factions, specialy Monroe a familiar customer. While wandering away, Oryn found a ranger of Monroe, he was ran out a horde not long but he got bitten. Disinfect for him, Oryn said that if you didnt get bite more than an hour, you' r fine and show him his bite scar. The ranger say goodbye and tell Oryn to stay away because a war between factions gonna start. Later, Oryn seen the bomb blow up the city, he had never seen that ranger anywhere more. Oryn still decide to sell items with factions.


Would you like your character to start with any items?
Mechanic tool, a car

Would you like your character to start with any skills?
Amateur mechanic, speed demon.

Is your character a member of a group?
No

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• Our Lore Master, MindGate, has already written up documentation on the specifics of the virus. You stated that if you get bit, you won't turn as long as you disinfect the wound within an hour; but, that's simply not true.
  • In the What We Become universe, everyone is infected. Similar to how it works in The Walking Dead. No matter how you die, you'll turn as long as your brain isn't destroyed. The bites themselves don't infect you, but they do make the infection set in faster.
  • The only way to avoid turning after being bit is by amputating the limb, if possible. If you weren't bit on one of your extremities, you're out of luck. This needs to be done within half an hour, tops, but even that may be pushing it.
• Additionally, your mention of a mutant is fine. Coincidentally, this lore is supernatural. There are threats outside of zombies, i.e., monsters. Horus very well could have encountered one. Being injured by one won't make the infection set in faster, but they can still kill you.
  • Animals can also turn, and being bitten by them will make the infection set in faster. I thought that'd be worth mentioning.

Cheatmagician said

Character Name
Horus Oryn

I Agree
Yes

Has this character appeared in a previous lore?
No

Age
20

Blood Type
O

Personality
Positive and a keen mind,like to talking and make friends, traveling around. He hate to be cheated. Always try his best to solve the problem till he cant do it anymore.

Character Motivations
The feeling want to help good people, his goal was to find a place where zombie cant reach and having a happy family.

Physical Appearance
Not bad-looking with short brown hair. Chin beard type, sharp eyes looking.

Character Image Link
https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/732266036463927439/853932148171866112/image2.png

Mechanical Occupation
Engineer

In-Character Occupation
Progammer and mechanic

Biography
Start when he seen his mom was a truly hero while she save people from the fire, but herself cant pass out after saved these are. Shocked by this he wanna let good people get a repay fit to what they deserve. Found himself really good with machines and progams, he manage to be a progammer. One day, the Z come. He managed to gather supply stuff to fix his own car and wandering on it, avoid the city and zombie.
Having a car give Horus Oryn much advantage, but that also the weak point of Oryn. While traveling out the town, he had found a group of people haven in a house, he knew that not a good idea because waves zombie in the night gonna wipe them from this world. His car have enough seat for this group though they only have 3 people, looted the police station armed them. More than a year wandering with Tom, Alex, james enough to delivery his rear for them.
One day, Oryn and his friends first met a mutant, its killed Alex and Tom right away. Oryn and James try to kill the mutant with handguns but that didnt make an effect to it. They ran to the car and drive as fast as they can to escape.
James got infected by the mutant claws and turn into zombie on the car, Oryn got bitten on forearm he kick James out the car and blow his head out. Oryn thinks that he gonna die soon but he still searching for a hope. Take out a bottle of disinfect, antiseptic the wound and wait. He didnt turn to a zombie, impressive. Oryn speculate, that maybe disinfect the wound in 1 hour might wipe the virus, keep him alive. He had found out something really important
Years gone by, now he a wanderer merchant who selling items to the factions, specialy Monroe a familiar customer. While wandering away, Oryn found a ranger of Monroe, he was ran out a horde not long but he got bitten. Disinfect for him, Oryn said that if you didnt get bite more than an hour, you' r fine and show him his bite scar. The ranger say goodbye and tell Oryn to stay away because a war between factions gonna start. Later, Oryn seen the bomb blow up the city, he had never seen that ranger anywhere more. Oryn still decide to sell items with factions.


Would you like your character to start with any items?
Mechanic tool, a car, a hand gun, a bottle of disinfect

Would you like your character to start with any skills?
Amateur mechanic, speed demon.

Is your character a member of a group?
No

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Cheatmagician said

Character Name
Horus Oryn

I Agree
Yes

Has this character appeared in a previous lore?
No

Age
20

Blood Type
O

Personality
Positive and a keen mind,like to talking and make friends, traveling around. He hate to be cheated. Always try his best to solve the problem till he cant do it anymore.

Character Motivations
The feeling want to help good people, his goal was to find a place where zombie cant reach and having a happy family.

Physical Appearance
Not bad-looking with short brown hair. Chin beard type, sharp eyes looking.

Character Image Link
https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/732266036463927439/853932148171866112/image2.png

Mechanical Occupation
Engineer

In-Character Occupation
Progammer and mechanic

Biography
Start when he seen his mom was a truly hero while she save people from the fire, but herself cant pass out after saved these are. Shocked by this he wanna let good people get a repay fit to what they deserve. Found himself really good with machines and progams, he manage to be a progammer. One day, the Z come. He managed to gather supply stuff to fix his own car and wandering on it, avoid the city and zombie.
Having a car give Horus Oryn much advantage, but that also the weak point of Oryn. While traveling out the town, he had found a group of people haven in a house, he knew that not a good idea because waves zombie in the night gonna wipe them from this world. His car have enough seat for this group though they only have 3 people, looted the police station armed them. More than a year wandering with Tom, Alex, james enough to delivery his rear for them.
One day, Oryn and his friends first met a mutant, its killed Alex and Tom right away. Oryn and James try to kill the mutant with handguns but that didnt make an effect to it. They ran to the car and drive as fast as they can to escape.
James got infected by the mutant and turn into zombie on the car, Oryn had seen the inconstant of James, He kick him out the car and blow his head out. Now Oryn gonna make his ways alone.
Years gone by, now he a wanderer merchant who selling items to the factions, specialy Monroe a familiar customer. While wandering away, Oryn found a ranger of Monroe, he was ran out a horde not long but he got bitten. Cut his limb out, Oryn said that if you didnt get bite more than an hour your fine. The ranger say goodbye and tell Oryn to stay away because a war between factions gonna start. Later, Oryn seen the bomb blow up the city, he had never seen that ranger anywhere more. Oryn still decide to sell items with factions.


Would you like your character to start with any items?
Mechanic tool, a car, a hand gun, a bottle of disinfect

Would you like your character to start with any skills?
Amateur mechanic, speed demon.

Is your character a member of a group?
No

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